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Small kisses trailed up the neck
slowly turn into tiny nips
and suddenly breathing is just a little bit harder.
Nails drag slowly,
roughly
down sides and across skin.
Our eyes close and our lips touch.
There is no love greater than this.
I can feel my heart beating faster
as your fingers trail across my chest
and across old scars.
My back arches and small noises escape
followed by whispered “I love you”s.
Bit by bit, my clothing is removed,
my hands above my head,
my belt around my wrists.
I plead with you and I watch you smile
with passion and satisfaction,
yet still your response is “No.”
Fruits of seduction placed across my stomach
a whipped cream and chocolate dream.
My mind races as my head goes back, soft gasps
and sharp exhales working themselves in and out of me.
My pleads increase in number as I watch you.
Your tongue cleaning me of sweetness left behind
across my torso.
A smile and a yes, “I need you, I want you.”
Your clothes intertwine with my own on the floor
and our eyes meet for one last moment of sanity.
I am yours
and you are mine
in this sweet caress of lovers bodies.
©2006-2009 ~Roo-kie
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I'm not really all too thrilled with how this came out. But alas, I said I was writing one and here it is.

Inspired by [link]

I don't know if you'd consider it 'Erotic' considering it's mainly suggestive I suppose...but I think just about anyone can get what it's suggesting. So yes.

If one person...and I mean ONE person cracks some dumb joke about this, or thinks it's funny to tease me about it...it's coming down. I'm sick of people making fun of me --; You may find it funny, but even when I write these as jokes I still put a lot of effort into my writing. Critique it all you want from an artistic stand point, but don't make fun of me. I'm more sensitve than people seem to grasp.

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Not too much.
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Good news!
I could see everything. =)
Slightly better diction would make it more "feelable", though. Make us, the readers, FEEL the belt digging into the skin, the breathing...plunge us into it, no mercy!

Other than that...bravo. Is this your first one?
Aw. :(

I'm sorrryyy.
You know when I do it, it is cause I'm jealous of your poetic sex life.. ;)

:giggle:
SEE! I poked fun at myself instead of you/the poem. =P

Besides, I love this.
Cause I'm a perv, and I love you and the way you write. I'd love it if you wrote about cow shit. Okay, I'd think you were weird, but hey...it is the thought that counts right?


"Your tongue cleaning me of sweetness left behind -across my torso."

That must be a long way, across that torso!

I CAN'T HELP IT. You are .5 skinnier. I have to be mean.
You love me, and you make jokes at my expense too. So we are even. :heart:

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~heliums goes inside me and ~foils has me covered. :XD:
Sexy, but not vulgar, which is very good. I like how it came out! :+fav:

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"If I could dream at all, it would be about you. And I'm not ashamed of it."

- t w i l i g h t
:XD: Kinky.I like this. :) Don't take it down! :o Who jokes about it?>< Me and Amanda? :x When we joke we're only...joking. =X Sorrryyyy..

Anyways, it's about SEX! :giggle: Essss... Eeeee....Exxxx! (Kindergartner!)
Like I was sayingggg, it's sex. We gotta poke fun at youuu.:(

Not that I write poems about this, but I couldn't bring myself to submit them. XD I guess I'd be emberassed, mainly because I'm 15?... :shrug: Don't consider that though because I honestly love this.:D

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I go inside =balloons :)

LOL HAI. :heart:
:giggle: You're very, very right! I want my readers to feel it more.
I think I thought a little too much about what some of my friends might say...but I'll let that go next time, I promise!

Thank you :aww: I've written a few actually, but I really hate my older ones.

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DUH! Everyone is jealous of my poetic sex life :XD:

:lmao:

Awww, you looooove meeeee? :heart: Even when I'm being a total perv? Haha that makes me happy.
One thing though...I'm so not writing about cow shit.

:O I AM NOT FAT!

:heart: But yeah, we're even. So we love each other.

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Good, I'm very glad! Thank you.

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Aww :heart: Thank you very much!

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